Here is a compilation of test footage of the burglary scene, escaping scene, and a stunt with a match to be included in a dialogue scene with B1, my character’s brother or partner.
I showed this to Matt and here are some notes from his critique.
- He suggested shooting it with more cuts to emphasize certain actions.
- He suggested that I didn’t have to show everything with a wide shot, for example, I could track only his feet when he walks in, and we see him throw the fag bud on the floor.
- He couldn’t see the full length of the jump, or height, and I was making it look easier than it is. Should film the jump with separate cuts, for example a shot of his feet jumping off, and another of his hands catching onto the ledge.
- He suggested that wide shots that capture a lot in the frame is good when there is a lot going on in the frame, but for the shots in my film, it might be better to keep shots tight, and not show the audience ”everything”
- He suggested have some shots where the camera moves past an object, for example past a tree, to make the scenes cut smoother.
Just to explain where I will use the ‘Putting out a match’ stunt. Before the final burglary B2 tells B1 that it will be his lost job, B1 responds with something like “you say that before each job”. B2, to show that he has made an absolute decision, to show that he is being serious, puts out a match with his tongue, and maybe goes on to reply something that means “this is the last time I’m saying it”, the line is to be decided with B1. Here is the inspiration for this stunt from a movie a watched recently called Eastern Promises (2007)
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